Week 14. Peer Review for 20518 이정민

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
This essay deserves five points. it displays an interesting and unique perspective on a highly specialized topic.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?


Thesis
What is the thesis?

Internet doesn't develop us.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
I would agree with this thesis with explain the advantages of internet.

Any other thoughts?
good introduction.

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Yes

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Yes.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
I think, yes it did.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner? 
I think it is enough.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
I think she should more summarize her opinion.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
I think her structure was good.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
I disagreed with it.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I still disagree with this.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?


How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
She should develop her refutation more.

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
yes 

Is the research from appropriate sources?
yes

Are the sources obvious?
Yes

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
yes

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
I think she would change her essay for APA style.